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Tuesday, 30 June 2020

My escape - by Fergus

My escape - by Fergus When i was 4 years old i had to leave my county. My name is Fergus and this is my story. It was a dark gloomy night I woke up to the sound of bombs going of. I ran of to find my Mum and Dad but they were already up packing the things we needed they told me i need to pack my pressurise things I took is my teddy, clothes, And we all took food and ran. We meet anther people from down our street we crossed mutants, rivers and forest. We saw a dead body while we went over the Montana we saw animals eating it. We went for miles and months on the run trying to find somewhere to stay. We got on a broken boat but we said thats good for now. We fond so many places but they were stranded there was noting on the islands just sand we were so disapionted but then we were aprcaing a big place this looks successful. We were successful it was not stranded. We went in and the people were so nice we asked them where we were they said why do you ask because were refugees and they said we were in New Zealand they said where are you from we said we were from Syria that miles from here. Do you want to live with us we said yes please. The end
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3 comments:

  1. Anonymous30 June 2020 at 12:16

    Hi Fergus! I think people will appreciate how short your story is and I like how they passed different islands. Though there are quite a few spelling errors, punctuation errors and quotation marks would make it less confusing. Otherwise this is a very good story.

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  2. Anonymous30 June 2020 at 12:25

    Kia Ora Fergus,
    Its me Carys. I really like how you did your story just remember your spelling.

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  3. Anonymous30 June 2020 at 12:29

    Hi Fergus
    I really like your story I like it how you put yourself into the Situation.This reminds me of the time went camping.Maybe next time try slow down the past of the story.

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